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The Hidden:ch Special:16 =third person POV=

Okay, this isn't the chapter yet. It'll be down beneath this paragraph. This paragraph is just to celerify how this chapter works. It's in third person point of view instead of first person like normal. It's just a quick scene I wrote earlier today and it takes place during the time Alex is getting the injections. It's a description of a specific occurrence of his physical body. I'll post chapter 17 later and it'll be back in first person. Just a heads up for you guys, there will be more parts that take place in third person, so be prepared. Enjoy :) (P.s. check out ch 15 if you haven't done so yet :D it's a great chapter)

 
 
 

Ch16

 
 
 
 
2010, April 14
Location: Dara detention facility and state prison
Approx time: 1 minute and 50 seconds after first injection...
 
A tear eased itself between Alex's eyelids. He was unconscious... Mostly. It balanced itself on his eyelids like a cat, and its agileness was so faint but so pure. Or maybe it was like a bird, perched in its nest, keeping its warmth.
It was as if it was alive and had a soul of its own. The truth was, there was something special within that tear. Wonders and spectacles, and shocking truths and astonishing dreams. They all glistened brightly, but faintly, within THAT single tear. As it held itself patiently on Alex's eyelids, it slowly lossed it balance and finally, fell... 
It rolled gently, and smoothly across his cheek. Every roll bringing more and more momentum, but somehow, keeping its speed. It was light, but dark. It was heavy, but waightless. It was translucent but colored, and emotionless, and bright. It was the many lessons Alex had learned. All into one lifespan, and spun accordingly in his last moment. The one thing that carried his memories. It sparkled, and glistened happily, but frown with a dark unknown passion. A passion, and a hate. A hate, and desperate order. Desperate, and sorrow, meaningless. But.. Somehow... It DID mean something. It all meant something. It all meant SOMETHING... Something.... Something....... In the end, his tear was bittersweet.. Just like all tears..... 
 
Alex's eyes started to twitch. A muscle in his arm had a slight spasm. His head jerked. Suddenly, his eyes opened.....
 

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Ying-Yang

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YES *pumps fist* XD

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Ying-Yang

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:O SWEET I WANT MORE

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Everything Else...

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Okand

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Thanks dynamus. That means. Lot to me man 8D

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dynamus

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wow okand you should seriously consider publishing this,It would be right up there with Anne McCaffrey, and Christopher Paolini.

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Okand

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Makes

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Okand

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Your comment make me so frigin pleased ;)

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~Kaichi-Beindegan~

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I am so frigin pleased.

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good suspense

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SHOUTBOX FTW Epic chapter btw

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Haha :p

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Nooooooooooooooooooooooooo *goes back in time and curses the guy who invented cliff hangers* okay now I'm happy ^_^ great chapter fun to see it from a different view.

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Koori_shinobi

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Will Alex wake up? Don't tell me. e.e

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Okand

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Haha thanks guys no problem :p hehe there will be more don't worry. There will be LOTS more....

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write more, I just simply can't wait ( bangs fists on surface and screams in frustration)

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*sits speechless*

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Haha, I'm really happy to have everyone's support like this :)

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YES *pumps fist* XD

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Okand

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You'll get more ;) believe me haha

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:O SWEET I WANT MORE

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