Avian: Alina

This article was written by PyrastelleAkima on 2012-01-08 under Novels & Stories.

Hai thar :D This is the prolouge to the novel I am writing. It doesn't get to powers and telekinesis and such until very very late in the story, so I am only posting the prolouge for the feedback and constructive critism. Enjoy! :3

Prologue

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This was the end; she knew it, for it was inevitable.

After years of running and to protect the only people in this big, cruel world she loved, her efforts to keep them safe would turn up as futile, her desperate struggle would end, and there was nothing she could possibly do about it.

The sound of her heart cracking brought on the fraught denial.

“There must be another way, there has to be! Don’t tell me there is not! I won’t accept it! I just won’t!’ She said, burying her face in her hands to hide the beads of water forming in the corners of her eyes, she shook her head violently, a black blur of hair flinging side to side.

‘This cannot be happening!’ The woman thought.

 Today had started like any other day, happily tucked away their little old cabin.

'They hadn’t been after us for over a year!' she continued thinking' Those bastards! No, no-no! I thought we were safe! Why can’t they just leave us be.…'

She felt the familiar sensation of spite flow through her like a blazing flame.

‘Please just listen to me Veronica-’

The moment she heard that name she snapped. No one would ever be allowed call her that despised name, let alone her husband. Never would anyone utter that name to her again.

‘NO! Don’t you ever call me Veronica, that’s the name they gave me, you know my real name! You know it!’

Saudia- meaning dark beauty- was her name, not what they gave her to go by. Veronica was no longer her stamp, never again.

David, on impulse, gripped her shoulders, little buds of sweat rolling down his forehead as his whole body shook with absolute fear.

Just listen to me! If I don’t go out there and fight, they will waltz right in take her! I can at least hold them back.You already know that! She has to go now, or we’ll lose our daughter again! Under no circumstances will I allow her to be taken away from us! Don’t you dare be selfish! Think of her. You have to take her and run.’

The woman wanted to fall to her knees, scream at the whoever was doing this to her and her family, and let her hot tears escape from their prison. She knew he was right, no matter how much it hurt.

‘But...But….David… There is no stopping you, is there? ’

She sighed heavily.

‘I love you David. I really do.’

David suddenly felt himself gain a little more strength.

‘I love you too, more than you will ever know.’

Then, in one swift motion, he surprised her by gently taking her into his arms and giving her a nice, long, tender kiss.

He gazed into her electrical eyes and smiled.

‘See you in Hell, Saudia.’ He said before he let her go and bolted out the door.

‘DAVID!’ she screamed out, knowing there was nothing she could do now but save her daughter from this horror.

‘Don’t worry, I will.’ She whispered under her breath, trying to hold a cry in.

She turned, ran to a small closet, and opened it wide.

‘Baby?’

A small girl wearing pajamas stepped quickly out of her hiding place.

Saudia wasted no time.

‘Do you remember the tunnel your Father and I showed you in the basement? I want you to go through it, and then run very far away, as fast as you can. Don’t come back, no matter what, DON’T COME BACK. You know where to go. We’ll come for you. I promise, do you understand?’ She told her daughter, keeping a brave face.

We thought they had given up, we let our guard down.

WE MADE A MISTAKE.

And now we are paying for it with our daughter.

Her daughter shakily nodded then proceeded to ask her mother

‘Who are they? Why are those people here? Why isn’t Daddy with you?’

The woman bit her lip.

‘Just go to the basement, everything will be fine.’ Saudia managed to get out of her throat, glancing behind her back every few seconds.

‘But, why!? I want to stay with you!’ cried the girl with tears running down her cheeks.

Saudia looked at her daughter with sorrow, the sweet little girl who had big brown eyes, soft wavy hair, smooth chocolate skin, and the brightest smile that she loved so much, but knew would probably never see again.

As long as she is safe....

Saudia unclipped a round pendant necklace from her neck and thrust it into her daughter’s hands.

I do not care about what happens to me.

‘You see this necklace? It’s magick. Real magick. It will protect you while we are gone. And all you have to do is believe in it. See?’

Her daughter gasped as she saw the stone began to glow a soft, light blue.

She smiled sadly and wiped the tears off her daughter's cheeks.

It helped me with my gifts, it will help her too.

‘Remember, with this I will always be with you.’

She bent down to hug her for one last time, and quietly whispered in her ears

‘Oh baby, I’m so sorry….You don’t deserve this…..Please forgive me….’

Not just for leaving you, but for what you are bound to find out about me, your father, and yourself.

‘Sorry for what? What’s happening? Whatever it is I forgive you! Please, just let me stay! I can help!’

Hearing her daughter say that stabbed her in the heart and immediately brought out the tears. She embraced her daughter even harder.

It is not fair; The craziness she has been born into, this should not be her problem.

At that moment, fire was thrown through the window of the house, and as the little girl screamed, Saudia grabbed her and tossed her into the basement

But now......

‘I will always love you!’ were the last words her daughter heard from her mother before the door was slammed shut and locked.

She will have to face this herself.

Saudia turned to face her enemy.

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By the way, please don't comment about the ' I already know it is ' but I am too lazy to fix it XD

 





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26 Comments:


By: NephilimZaggy - 2012-01-08 17:44:08      
Very nice indeed. I like it alot. Cant really critisise on anything. EXCELENT
By: Freakster101 - 2012-01-08 17:30:53      
THIS IS AWESOME PYRA YOU HAVE AN AMAZING TALENT :)
By: ShadowWalker - 2012-01-08 16:07:02      
Thats okay, I want to read it!
By: PyrastelleAkima - 2012-01-08 15:39:57      
Ok, thanks everyone! :D I'll try not to make it lag as much, and not as many paragraphs. Thanks for the critism:3 And I guess I will post some more, but it really has nothing to do with psionics much.........
By: ShadowWalker - 2012-01-08 11:15:47      
That's very, very good, although I notice the paragraphs were short at the beginning, and longer as you went through. Too many paragraphs I think, but it works fine like that because it is a prologue. XD Brilliant btw, are you going to post any more?
By: RavenArrow - 2012-01-08 10:56:22      
Too much emotion.Nononono,i'm joking.It's Awsome really!Amazing,and moving!Well done,keep up the good work!!!!!
By: Maestro - 2012-01-08 07:47:40      
Okay what I did notice is the ah dont know how to say this but like a bit much of lagging on . I dont think you will get me on that. XD
By: Vaiden - 2012-01-08 07:16:10      
Goku i sent you a pm or msg on this site not your broken phone. Your not in trouble. Just talk to me i need to tell you stop avoiding me.
By: JAFFA - 2012-01-08 07:15:11      
you know that butterfly feeling that you get in your chest after reading a really amazing book?the moment I started reading, I got it, I still have it now actually! don't stop writing, I want more!
By: kakashi-sensei - 2012-01-08 07:09:59      
Sorry.
By: Vaiden - 2012-01-08 07:07:51      
He's not answering grrr....
By: PyrastelleAkima - 2012-01-08 07:06:45      
Um...Idc? Private message him ^-^ I only want constructive comments :D So stop posting it on here and PM him. Please and Thank You:3
By: Vaiden - 2012-01-08 07:03:16      
Awsome prolunge pyra. But there's alot i need to explain to goku.
By: PyrastelleAkima - 2012-01-08 06:59:41      
Thanks everyone! :D Not exactly the constructive critism I was hoping for....but thanks anyway:3
By: Vaiden - 2012-01-08 06:59:19      
Answer my msg that i sent you.....THERE'S ALOT I NEED TO TELL YOU GOKU ALOT.
By: kakashi-sensei - 2012-01-08 06:56:59      
Oh uh see my phone had,broke and i just got caught up in work. Sorry.
By: Vaiden - 2012-01-08 06:54:29      
Stop.ignoring.ME!!!!
By: kakashi-sensei - 2012-01-08 06:53:16      
Jeez you had me crying at the prologue. You have a talent.
By: Vaiden - 2012-01-08 06:52:55     - 1 
ANSWER THE MSG I HAVE SENT YOU.
By: Maestro - 2012-01-08 06:52:04      
most captivating story I have read so far. Its great!
By: Vaiden - 2012-01-08 06:51:55      
GOKU YOU HAVE ALOT OF EXPLAINING. WHAT THE HELL!!!!!
By: kakashi-sensei - 2012-01-08 06:51:19      
I love to read. I can tell that this is going to be one of my favorite books out of all 107 of then. He he.
By: ohya5 - 2012-01-08 06:43:23      
self-freaking-amazing
By: kakashi-sensei - 2012-01-08 06:39:17      
Hey vaiden
By: Vaiden - 2012-01-08 06:37:33      
:'C such sadness....i'm gonna make my next chapter like this him having a flash back.
By: kakashi-sensei - 2012-01-08 06:37:27      
Amazing.



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